Why does my mix sound unprofessional?

is it that obvious they lived then? I believe I will need 10 minutes on Monday, maybe less... like music what you don't know about history in the classical middle east is a lot

well, let's see on monday then :bowtie:

yeah right

okie, ttyl...time for me to sleep...cya later mate 😄 😴

Hey Jim! You there online?, I made a track for a song...need some review

My phone is receiving EB emails, but I am busy spending quality family time with my son and my mom today, no music. Shopping for cookie cutters, party paraphenial and ornaments and deciding who will cook/bake what for Lucian's birthday celebration in 2 weeks and the impending holiday festivities at the end of the year. I also owe my mother-in-law a visit or long phone session at some point. Tonight before bed or tomorrow I will check it out, okay?

Sorry guys, I am cashing in my chips and moving off this thread. I hope one day you are prepared to defend your music with such fervour...

I am around... don't see anything new on your soundcloud so link me

http://vocaroo.com/i/s0F4OXsgmNP7 here's the raw I din complete it...mostly tell me about the arrangement and music part

its only maybe 30 seconds of music, but if you really elaborate on that some more and maybe write a release in the form of a bride or middle 8 or something you will have an okay song in the modern conception of that term

getting better, keep at it.... just keep dong it, it'll get easier

There aren't really any shortcuts in the arts unless you are a savant sort of genius though it help s to start very young...

I made it in ableton live lite 9. So there are many limitations. I'm going to my college now, will be back after 10hrs or so, then I'll work on it.

Edit: I missed my bus😞...so I'm free now

nothin' worse than missing the train or bus to work/school... you know what else sucks? when the train is overcrowded and they make you wait for the enxt one 20 minutes later and it'll make you late, but if you get back in your car and get back on the highway you will probably be 30 minutes late and that's when you can find a free parking space!

instead of WORKING on it, try THINKING about it and sitting on your hands for 24 hours, then resume work with lots of really developed ideas of where to take it

also, that flutey part really sounds weird to me against the vocal, the cadence or something.... have a listen for yourself...

its not very funky, the whole song, is it? like the syncopation is not really happenin' even though its at a dancey tempo.... speaking of which, do you ever go out dancing ? I don't anymore (well, once in a blue), but I used to (from raves to goth clubs, mambo to salsa -- even took swing lessons with someone I dated beore Iw as married) and it was very good for my rhythm, the visual aspect of me playing in a band on stage and it was a generally good time...

sometimes when I am working on the overall 'pulse' of a song that's sequenced I will blast it loud and proud in one room and then go around the corner to another room and listen to it that way like through the walls of a nightclub (it doesn't have to be dance music, just anything over 100 BM that needs a strong drum and bass groove) and if its not making me move my feet a little I will rethink the drum and bass parts, mostly the cadences, not usually note selection

BUT ANYWAY, you might want to move some asses if you really wanna save some souls... Gospel Music has the right idea.... you wanna hear some booty shakin' music that's all about Christianity check out the EARLY Staples Singers.... super religious, super-badass.... listen to the groove -- I am convinced that if there's a good he wants to hear more music written for him like that and less hymns and such that are just too gloomy

😂 hey I just finished the full song.. I know you are bit busy...but I need suggestions for more good quality.

its not done.... it takes way more than 2 days to write and arrange a song unless you are really inspired and the song is really simple and elegant with very little instrumentation

but link

I am not too busy.... it Monday here and I have to take my son to school in a bit and then go to the office for an meeting with my boss and opposite number in AR to look at our upcoming check schedule... but none of that is a big deal time wise

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1kKiGEMmarL here's the full song , I didn't do any mixing...just arrangement and music

Edit: don't mind the vocals, they are just for reference purpose 😂 and also the breaks in the song...I just kept it for some reason I forgot but they'll not be in the actual song.

Basically the melody just keeps on repeating

strucutre's a bit better.... drum groove leaves much to be desired, might be the wrong tempo overall for this song but at the least, tone down the number of rolls outside of transitions and try to inject some more 'swing' into the drum pattern, its stiff.... all the 'one line' tonal parts play the same melody as the vocal, try a diatonic harmony in addition to a double and consider COUTNER MELODY as well as maybe doing something with call and answer, having a similarly phrased diatonic harmony to the melody play a few beats back in the form of a cannon or rondo at times, maybe the end of each phrase.... try varying the melody or change the chords around it while leaving the melody notes the same (reharmonizing for beginners, try swapping all chords to their relative majors or minors, then try adding a dominant 7 to a few)

... no discernable bass groove, but I didn't have it cranked up.... try locking the kick and bass together on all of the bass' accent notes

my mind really wandered after the first 2 minutes and Iw as like thinking about getting more coffee and maybe buying Danish later and not listening carefully anymore... so I am going to brush my teeth and wake my son

you, on the other hand, should mute everything but the bass and drums and really lock them so they work together as the spine of the song and also have some real feeling, then make sure the piano chords support the groove and don't just drone alone.... look at your VELOCITY levels for every note/chord, the dynamics are so steady its putting me to sleep... even if you compress it all while mixing down later to even the levels out those changes in velocity will still be perceived in the finished version, especially if you spend some time programming your synthesizers to have more than just volume sensitive to velocity and aftertouch.... try filter cutoff as the most obvious velocity sensitive parameter, but you could do all sorts of stuff depending what kidna modulation options your software provides. READ THE MANUALS if you are confused

but yeah, mute everything, work on the rhythm section.... you probably don't drum or play the bass,so this will eb the thing you really wanna labor over until you can kick out grooves without thinking.... they can be stiff and mechanical, Kraftwerkian, but if you do that you need to syncopate more like on trans-Europe express and numbers

As I did it in ableton live lite 9 I don't have much flexibility and access to the effects. And there can be only 8 tracks per song. I only have eq3. And many other limitations, I wanted to sidechain the bass and kick but in this version I have to have an extra track but I can't because I used up all the 8 tracks

Can you explain which type of rhythm/drum beat will suit the song? because I have no idea of drums section at all.

I didn't say a word about effects.... where did I say effects? anyway, its your song, I can't write the drum part for you.... unless you pay me LOL, but I don't know what's right for it off the top of my head w/o working on the bassline too and then that's just my point of view..... there are probably a dozen ways to go, its just that what you have SO FAR is not one of them, though it may be a window into a potentially pleasing rhythm if you THINK HARDER ABOUT IT and try maybe dancing to it a bit

you will know when its right because you won't want to ask anyone's opinion anymore

I gotta jet.... I'll be available after I drop Lu at preschool

sure, just drop in a message when you are back

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p2-1Af1HUjw

here's the song